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Hayyan by PhantomSeptember Hayyan by PhantomSeptember
The composition isn't all that great (in fact it's really bad) on this one, plus the face is lopsided. I wanted to draw a little something of the shapeshifter character I'm entering in :iconpersnicketese: 's writing tournament, but I'm not really sure this is up to par.

Hopefully I can draw something better soon/after finals are over.

Hayyan me
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LeikEerie Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2010
I like the eyes, and the attention to detail in the flowers. I also like that you didn't feel compelled to fill the entire page and left some of it blank. I could see it on papyrus paper, but white is good too.

I don't feel like it's a favourite, but I feel like it's very crisp and clean and I appreciate that.
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Persnicketese Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2010
Shapeshifter?! And he looks so cool! His eyes are intense, I love it!
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PhantomSeptember Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2010
Yeah! Says so on my Ref Sheet for him I think. :)

Glad you like it!
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Persnicketese Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2010
Of course! He sounds really interesting!
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PhantomSeptember Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2010
Thanks! I only wish my writing skills were better.
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Persnicketese Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2010
You're writing skills are good, whatcha talking about?
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PhantomSeptember Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2010
I wish they were better. I guess they will be eventually, if I keep practicing.
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Persnicketese Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2010
It helps a lot, I need to write more often myself.
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Musashi-Twist Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Most certainly interesting. I've just read your audition for HfD, and I must say I am rather intrigued.

Once again, I admire the skill and stylistic choices you have made in drawing your character. But, as I would like this to be a helpful comment, I have something I'd like to say. Your other comments seemed as though you were wondering what felt "off" about the face, I think it's the fact that we see Hayyyan's face as well as just a little bit of the side of the head at the same time, making it both a sort of strange hybrid between a 3/4 facial view and a head on facial view, meaning we see too much of the head at the angle we are seeing your character. I think this might be tweaked if you had moved the nose and his right eye (the one on the left of the picture) more to the right and altered the visual angle on those. That way, it'd look more like a 3/4 view.

Once again, I always posit that my attempts at critique could be complete bull, and despite my comments and suggestions, I think this is a fine piece.
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PhantomSeptember Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010
Definitely. I think you must be right!
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Musashi-Twist Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Glad I could help.
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E-N-O-C-H Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
A shapeshifter, huh? That should be fun to write. I can’t wait to see more of him. :)

I am getting a faint, tinkly “something’s off” feeling with the face, but I don’t know what it is. I hate it when that happens to me, but I don’t find it distracting in this pic. Btw, I love his hair. I kinda want to pet it...
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PhantomSeptember Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2010
Hope he works out. Haven't written him before so I hope it won't be too bumpy reading it.

I know. I get the same feeling, and I'm not sure what is wrong with it either. Thanks though, I do hope it's not too distracting.

Ahaha, His hair is silky soft and poofy isn't it. Maybe he moonlights as a model for shampoo advertisements.
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EccentriKing Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2010
So gentlemanly...:)

As for what you said about it being lopsided, I think it might just be the mouth that's a little crooked...? But mouths do that sort of thing anyway...:shrug:

I think my favourite part of this might be the red wavy stuff though. It's rather nouveau looking.

What kind of flowers are those?
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PhantomSeptember Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2010
Ahaha, I think it's the whole face that makes the mouth look crooked, not the other way around. I redrew the mouth over and over and over to make sure it was good. I think it's the face in relation to the mouth that makes it look wrong. =3= The face is lopsided. XD

Made up lilies. Because I can't draw real flowers.
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EccentriKing Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2010
The face looks fine to me...it's hard to know what else to say. XD I think it looks just fine. The mouth doesn't even seem very crooked at all.

Well, they're very cool looking lilies...which was why I wondered. :)

I love how thick and shiny his hair looks. Does he have some kind of writing on his shirt...?
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PhantomSeptember Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2010
No, it really is lopsided. The contour of the cheek on the right (looking at the picture) is totally off. Also, there's a tilt that doesn't follow through with the whole head so it gets all lopsided for that reason too.

Yeah, it's ancient Persian script.
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